I’ve got the final (5th) chapter of a story I’ve been working on since NaNoWriMo all done, but I am worried that the timing of events is confusing to the reader. I’ve got multiple things going on in different places, and an environmental effect that is changing in both places at the same time. I fear I’m too close to the story to see the problem clearly enough to fix it, assuming it’s even there. I mean, I understand what’s going on but then I would, I wrote it
I was wondering if anybody would mind reading the story and letting me know if the last chapter is indeed confusing. And if so, suggestions on how to make it flow better would also be welcome.
The main story is posted at http://planetretcon.com/books/lcl02-the-relic. Feel free to also read the first story in the series at http://planetretcon.com/books/lcl01-too-good-to-be-true. I’ve uploaded a text file rough-draft version of the final chapter to http://planetretcon.com/lcl/book2/chapter5.txt.
Thanks in advance. I wish I could offer something for this but the best I have is a free read of my stuff, which is already out there for free reading!